After murdering an immigrant, he convinces his psychiatrist to declare him insane so as not to be put on trial, but a detective will follow his steps to lock him up.

    Logliner Posted on May 19, 2018 in Crime.
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      Who is the lead character, the murderer or the detective? (I can’t tell from reading your logline because it switches perspective halfway through)

      Singularity Answered on May 19, 2018.

      I know that. I just wanted to write about two characters. A choral history, but I failed. I will rewrite the logline. I have seen one of the defects, thanks to you and your comment.

      on May 20, 2018.
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        Maybe somewhere along — “When his wife’s therapist pleads insane after killing her, a grieving detective must prove it otherwise and bring justice” (to make things personal for him…)

        Summitry Answered on May 19, 2018.
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          Unfortunately, the premise is flawed.  Being declared insane won’t get him off the legal hook.   He  will still be arrested. tried and convicted.  That’s the way it works.  All that being declared insane might do is mitigate his sentence.  He might get a life sentence instead of the death penalty.

          Singularity Answered on May 19, 2018.

          Clearly. I wrote it wrong, but this comment has helped me find the right path. I hope you can read the correction. Thank you very much!

          on May 20, 2018.
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            As the others have pointed out, best you focus on one main character and change the premise so it makes logical sense in the current legal system.

            Also, I suggest you check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar to learn more about logline basics.

            Singularity Answered on May 22, 2018.
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