After the catastrophic earthquakes around the world, a seismologist must uncover the reason behind the mysterious stoppage of his time at 2:00 AM, else he remains in the past.
It is good ashes. But the problem here is the character’s conflict. It is only exterior.
Not long ago I attended a screenwriting workshop and a man came up to describe his idea: A man discovers that the events occurring in his life have already occurred in someone else’s. After finding out that the said man is dead, he must uncover the mystery connection and survive.
The above plot is interesting, and the way writer described was more interesting but he was put down immediately by the head speaker as the character did not have any inner conflict. An inner conflict makes your character connect to the audience. What is unique about your character that will connect the audience and drive them with his story?
I also would suggest you a non-linear approach to this. Why?
To make the audience relatable to your story’s arc. Think Batman Begins by Christopher Nolan. He unveils Bruce with a story taking place in two different situations. The inner conflict is easily understood.
You can show first few situations of his troubled hours and at the same time unveil the character with what just happened a few days/weeks ago that connects his troubled hours. Also adapting such approach will make you free to not rely on other people who have stopped. You can rely on science and your character.
I think the 2:00 PM time does not need to be mentioned in logline: ‘In a catastrophic earthquake the TIME stops for a volatile seismologist, he must find a way for not getting left behind in the past.’
its a great idea!! some trimming…
After his time stops at 2 AM, a seismologist uncovers the mystery behind the catastrophic earthquake or risk remaining in the past
It’s a cool inciting incident but if the time stopped for him, others are frozen right? That might get uncinematic, since who will he talk to?
What if he discovers someone unpaused and chases her to discover a whole group of unpaused people?
After encountering another unpaused human, a seismologist must solve the mystery of frozen time or risk remaining in the past
A group of unpaused people in the frozen world will drive your Act II
The first half could be Grand Theft Auto!!
Upon realising they are infact “trapped”
The second half will force them to split into 2 forces: “those to would like to stay in the past” will prevent the “those who’ve had their fun and would like to return to their kids”
suggested title: stopwatch
My Best wishes ashes123!