After the catastrophic earthquakes around the world, a seismologist must uncover the reason behind the mysterious stoppage of his time at 2:00 AM, else he remains in the past.

ashes123 Penpusher Asked on April 16, 2018 in SciFi.
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It is good ashes. But the problem here is the character’s conflict. It is only exterior.

Not long ago I attended a screenwriting workshop and a man came up to describe his idea: A man discovers that the events occurring in his life have already occurred in someone else’s. After finding out that the said man is dead, he must uncover the mystery connection and survive.

The above plot is interesting, and the way writer described was more interesting but he was put down immediately by the head speaker as the character did not have any inner conflict.  An inner conflict makes your  character connect to the audience. What is unique about your character that will connect the audience and drive them with his story?

I also would suggest you a non-linear approach to this. Why?
To make the audience relatable to your story’s arc. Think Batman Begins by Christopher Nolan. He unveils Bruce with a story taking place in two different situations. The inner conflict is easily understood.

You can show first few situations of his troubled hours and at the same time unveil the character with what just happened a few days/weeks ago that connects his troubled hours. Also adapting such approach will make you free to not rely on other people who have stopped. You can rely on science and your character.

I think the 2:00 PM time does not need to be mentioned in logline: ‘In a catastrophic earthquake the TIME stops for a volatile seismologist, he must find a way for not getting left behind in the past.’

Nettle Samurai Reviewed on April 16, 2018.

Does the character’s conflict must always be interior?

on April 16, 2018.

Actually, 2 AM plays an important role. That’s why I mentioned it.

on April 16, 2018.

No it must be both: Due to inner conflict a depth is created for your character and due to which his reaction to the exterior conflict gets acceptable or understandable. If you read Syd Field’s Foundation of Screenwriting, you will find this explained.

on April 16, 2018.

Also once the time stops in your movie, it will get settled in the audience’s mind that the clock’s is not ticking which will establish your need of importance to 2:00 AM. Albeit I can be wrong, I feel the importance of mentioning it can be a part of the bigger picture.

on April 16, 2018.

A character goes through a transformation in his 120 minutes screen time. But it is not always necessary that your character transforms. If such be the scenario, the movie tends to be a non-plot category whereas your story, I think, will not allow such non-plot characteristic. He will transform, given the situation. And to understand such transformation one must incite an inner conflict along with exterior conflicts.

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its a great idea!! some trimming…
After his time stops at 2 AM, a seismologist uncovers the mystery behind the catastrophic earthquake or risk remaining in the past

It’s a cool inciting incident but if the time stopped for him, others are frozen right? That might get uncinematic, since who will he talk to?

What if he discovers someone unpaused and chases her to discover a whole group of unpaused people?

After encountering another unpaused human, a seismologist must solve the mystery of frozen time or risk remaining in the past

A group of unpaused people in the frozen world will drive your Act II

The first half could be Grand Theft Auto!!

Upon realising they are infact “trapped”
The second half will force them to split into 2 forces: “those to would like to stay in the past” will prevent the “those who’ve had their fun and would like to return to their kids”

suggested title: stopwatch

My Best wishes ashes123!

variable Overlord Reviewed on April 16, 2018.

Good Suggestion. Thanks.

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Does time stop for everyone but the lead character? Just curious.

Richiev Singularity Reviewed on April 16, 2018.

Yeah! I think ashes123 meant time stopped for him thus freezing everyone else

on April 16, 2018.

Yeah! You are right! @variable

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