henbSamurai Posted: November 3, 20192019-11-03T23:18:41+10:00 2019-11-03T23:18:41+10:00In: SciFiAfter the fall of the Monster Hunters Union brought on by the people they wronged, it is a time when human worth is determined by the strength of the monster they have ownership over.– ShareFacebook2 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentMike Pedley United Kingdom (UK) 67 Loglines 633 Reviews 99 Best Reviews 50,994 Points View Profile Mike Pedley Singularity 2019-11-04T18:34:20+10:00Added an answer on November 4, 2019 at 6:34 pm Who has the Monster Hunters Union wronged? How have they been wronged? I think we may need a little more information about the world… there are people who hunt monsters, but also people have ownership over monsters like they are pets? In terms of the characters in the story, what’s the connection between the two?Does this end up being a dog-fighting type thing just with monsters?Who is the protagonist? What is the event that kick-started this story? What goal does this set up for the protagonist?Many of your loglines give us a premise but lack a story within that world. I think this is a shame, because some of the worlds you create are interesting. A logline needs that story – that’s simply what a logline is.Hope this helps.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 61 Loglines 3,406 Reviews 308 Best Reviews 81,421 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2019-11-04T19:17:48+10:00Added an answer on November 4, 2019 at 7:17 pm In a story, you have a lead characterSomething happens to that lead characterThis causes the lead character to have a goal.However, achieving that goal isn’t easy because something stands in the lead character’s way.Who is the lead character?What do they want?What is standing in their way?0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?