After three friends gain super-powers from a crashed alien ship, two of them must stop the third from destroying the city.

Nir Shelter Singularity Asked on August 7, 2018 in Examples.
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I agree, it would have been better if it was just the two of them. Loved the concept of only shooting through lenses that existed in each location (phones, webcams, CCTV, etc).

My only comment with this logline is that it lacks emotion. All I want to know is why is he destroying the city. Maybe some characteristics would help?

mikepedley85 Mentor Reviewed on August 7, 2018.

Good point, I think it’s established that he has an abusive father and is potentially emotionally unstable.

After three friends gain super-powers from a crashed alien ship, two of them must stop the emotionally unstable third from destroying the city.

on August 7, 2018.

Yep, I think that works!

on August 7, 2018.
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Chronicle (2012) – this was a good example of a successful film with a multi protag plot, which is rare, so I thought it might be interesting to review it.

Would it have been a better film if it was just two friends where one was the MC and the other was the antagonist?

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on August 7, 2018.
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Hmm.  Isn’t the thematic plot hook that in different ways the newly acquired powers tempt all three major characters to succumb to the dark side of their personalities?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on August 7, 2018.

It is, but at the end of act one (page 33 in the script) Andrew causes an accident by forcing a pickup truck off the road. Up to that point, they were having fun with relatevly innocuous activities – nobody got hurt. From the accident onwards, the other two (Mat and Steve) try to stop Andrew from hurting anyone else.

on August 8, 2018.
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Well, now that I’ve read the script and seen the movie, here is my take:

My m.o. is to draft a rough cut of a logline that answers what I consider to be the most important question:  what is the story hook?  So here is my rough cut version:

After acquiring super powers from a crashed alien ship, an emotionally unstable teen spins out of control as his powers grow.
(21 words)

This version frames the story from the traditional viewpoint of a singular protagonist. However, it is untraditional in that it does not set up a character who is control of his dramatic destiny, who is proactively pursuing a positive objective goal.

So, an alternative logline might be:

After they acquire super powers from a crashed alien ship, a teenager struggles to use them productively while preventing his emotionally unstable cousin from spinning out of control.
(28 words)

This version frames the story with dual — and dueling — protagonists, Matthew and his cousin, Andrew.  It does not include the 3rd character, Steve. I exclude him because it is Matthew, not Steve, who lays down the Inviolate Rules (don’t use the powers on other people, don’t use them in anger). It is Matthew, not Steve who is more concerned, who has the stronger emotional reaction to Andrew’s loss of control. He is the character who has the greater emotional bond to Andrew — they’re cousins.

In comparison, Steve ihas no particular emotional bond to the other two characters.  He likes everyone — and everyone likes him. He’s Mr. Congeniality, the most popular guy in school who faciliates the (temporary) reversal of Andrew’s fortune and status in the 1st 1/2 of Act 2.  Having fulfilled that role by the MPR, he’s killed off.

Now then. The writer could have elected to keep Steve alive to partner up with Matthew after the MPR to try to rescue Andrew.  But that’s not the choice the writer made. He was written as a disposable character. In contrast, Matthew, Andrew’s cousin, survives to the FADE OUT.

So the primary relationship dynamic occurs in a dyad, not a triad. (And the minimal “B” story plot line involving the romantic relationship belongs to Matthew.)

fwiw

dpg Singularity Reviewed on August 14, 2018.
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