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variableUberwriter
Asked: April 23, 20182018-04-23T05:27:21+10:00 2018-04-23T05:27:21+10:00In: Fantasy

After trying an anti aging cream, a 71 year old starts getting younger every morning and must seek its manufacturer to avoid dying…

…in 71 days (title)

The first half is about stuff he wanted to do but couldn’t. Around Mid Point he realizes that if it continues, he would probably become a foetus!

(maybe his nephew gave him a sample of this new product his lab’s currently working on, as a prank)

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    1. dpg

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      2018-04-23T06:05:36+10:00Added an answer on April 23, 2018 at 6:05 am

      Seems like a clone of the premise? for?”The Curious Case of Benjamin Button”? (2008).? Different story bootup (inciting incident) , but same dramatic problem, a character who lives his life backwards.

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      2018-04-23T15:01:26+10:00Added an answer on April 23, 2018 at 3:01 pm

      Can you make it clearer in the logline, that de-ages one year a day? Another difference is, it can be reversed, and that he has lived a full life before. How else can you make it fundamentally different? I mean the aging backward concept is probably not taboo now. Just needs your unique ?variable? take on it.

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      2018-04-23T21:53:37+10:00Added an answer on April 23, 2018 at 9:53 pm

      variable:

      Come to think about it, I think it’s a potentially cool concept.? It would be another story working off the primal wish of getting a 2nd chance to live one’s life over,? to right the wrongs, to make better decisions.? And I would suggest her biological time clock should age — or rather youth — backwards one day at a time.? However, the world doesn’t.? It keeps moving forward in time.? Which presents interesting choices she has to make.

      But I fear that the 1st reaction of most movie makers will be what mine was, “Oh,? that was already done with ‘Benjamin Button’.” So I think the logline (as well as the script) needs not only a different inciting incident (which you’ve got ) but a more interesting objective goal than finding the manufacturer.? I think her objective goal should be to seize the opportunity to live the life she always wanted to live but didn’t have the guts to live.

      fwiw

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