Aged out of foster care, Eric Grid needs to learn magic if he wants to become rich competing in a high stakes poker league controlled by the mafia.

oceanlegends Penpusher Asked on December 3, 2018 in Noir.
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You are showing us two story points that are not naturally connected.

If a person wants to get rich playing poker, they would learn to play poker.
Instead, you say the lead character wants to get rich playing poker, so they must learn magic.

How do those elements connect, how will magic help a person become a better poker player?

Richiev Singularity Reviewed on December 3, 2018.
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This is much better.

Just show how the magic and poker are linked

CraigDGriffiths Summitry Reviewed on December 3, 2018.
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