An angel from heaven comes down on earth to be with a depressed young man until the time that finally meets his soulmate in fulfillment of his deceased mother’s prayer.

    Penpusher Posted on May 5, 2019 in Fantasy.

    Interesting concept but i would like to know: who is protagonista? Antagjonist? What’s the Real stake? What’s up if angel failed mission?

    on July 23, 2019.
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      Who owns the story?  Who is the protagonist, the angel or the young man?  And why does the son deserve to have his mother’s prayer answered?  Why should an audience care, want him to find his soulmate?

      Singularity Answered on May 6, 2019.
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        Is the Angel happy with the assignment? I only ask because I am wondering where conflict is going to happen in your story.

        Here is an example of a logline where the angel did not want the assignment:

        “After a mothers fervent deathbed prayer, a stubborn angel is assigned to help a girl-shy young man find the woman of his dreams, and she must accomplish this task before she can return to heaven.” 

        Singularity Answered on May 6, 2019.
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          Ripping off comments above, how about this angle –
          “A trouble-making angel must help a hapless young man find his soulmate before she can get x.”

          I’m assuming the angel is protagonist.

          I recall there is a Damon/Affleck movie about bad angels though. I can’t remember the story, but consider looking it up if you don’t know it.

          Samurai Answered on May 7, 2019.
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            Good parts to build on. Agree with most of the other comments.

            Assuming the angel has no other conflict than in helping the man, the next attempt should clarify how the angel helps and if the angel reveals itself to the man or acts incognito.  Why does the man need help? If he’s depressed because of his mother, then it’s assumed and should be  replaced by a better description and his flaw or issue.  Be specific to paint  the mental picture and convey the  tone…different details make this a drama or comedy (within the fantasy).

            Even if the angel is the protag, it seems doable for it to not have any stakes other than the man’s soulmate. If the man is not the protag, he can still have the arc.

            Mentor Answered on May 9, 2019.
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