A special effects man decides to rob a bank in order to save his daughter who has leukemia.
“…An aspiring Hollywood filmmaker…” why specifically a filmmaker in Hollywood? How does this inform the character?
Well, if he gets revenge there’s not much of a story is there… Perhaps he tries to get revenge in a unique way, regardless, revenge is a negative goal. It would be best to give him something positive to pursue.
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