Tony ByrdPenpusher Posted: January 14, 20202020-01-14T23:31:44+10:00 2020-01-14T23:31:44+10:00In: ActionA special effects man decides to rob a bank in order to save his daughter who has leukemia.– ShareFacebook1 ReviewVotedOldestRecentNeer Shelter 23 Loglines 2,805 Reviews 258 Best Reviews 55,445 Points View Profile Nir Shelter Singularity 2020-01-15T07:28:17+10:00Added an answer on January 15, 2020 at 7:28 am “…An aspiring Hollywood filmmaker…” why specifically a filmmaker in Hollywood? How does this inform the character?Well, if he gets revenge there’s not much of a story is there… Perhaps he tries to get revenge in a unique way, regardless, revenge is a negative goal. It would be best to give him something positive to pursue.Goal aside, the logline isn’t structured correctly. Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar for more information on logline basics. 0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?