KnightriderMentor Posted: September 12, 20192019-09-12T19:33:18+10:00 2019-09-12T19:33:18+10:00In: Action An assassin with a split personality is hired to protect a client who, unknowingly, his other personality has been hired to kill. – Share Facebook 6 Reviews Voted Oldest Recent yqwertz 2 Loglines 108 Reviews 31 Best Reviews 5,069 Points View Profile yqwertz Mentor 2019-09-12T20:42:34+10:00Added an answer on September 12, 2019 at 8:42 pm Nice. That’s a great logline and a great premise for a story. 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp giannisggeorgiou 12 Loglines 130 Reviews 17 Best Reviews 4,741 Points View Profile giannisggeorgiou Samurai 2019-09-13T04:28:06+10:00Added an answer on September 13, 2019 at 4:28 am It hooked me right away. But then, I wanted to dig a little more. Both personalities are hired killers. Shouldn’t the protector be of a different profession? Like a bodyguard? Furthermore, shouldn’t the personalities be as different as possible to each other? A lot relies on what triggers the shift from one personality to the other. This can cause a comedic effect, like hearing a specific word or smelling a specific smell. I agree with dpg about the comedy element. I am wondering though how long can this premise keep a plot together? Is it a short film? Have you got a beat sheet or a synopsis? I would love to be surprised. 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp Richiev 61 Loglines 3,386 Reviews 307 Best Reviews 81,359 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2019-09-13T06:47:59+10:00Added an answer on September 13, 2019 at 6:47 am Agreed with the others, nice tight logline with a hook 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp guswakey 11 Loglines 14 Reviews 4 Best Reviews 461 Points View Profile guswakey Logliner 2019-09-14T02:11:44+10:00Added an answer on September 14, 2019 at 2:11 am An instantly interesting logline with a lot of potential! I’m interested to know more about the client- what are his/her reasons for being the target of the hit and why does he/she choose the protagonist to help protect them. Agree with the above- what is the trigger for his changing of personalities? Is it in the call to adventure of the mid point reversal that we are introduced to the direct conflict between the personalities? Consider me intrigued! 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp nicolesigaud 7 Loglines 4 Reviews 0 Best Reviews 186 Points View Profile nicolesigaud Logliner 2019-10-05T01:36:39+10:00Added an answer on October 5, 2019 at 1:36 am Very good logline. Congratulations! 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp Trix 4 Loglines 68 Reviews 13 Best Reviews 2,991 Points View Profile Trix Samurai 2020-01-14T02:45:01+10:00Added an answer on January 14, 2020 at 2:45 am Brilliant – Just thinking about making that play out well makes my head ache, but this is a brilliant hook! 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp You must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Captcha* Remember Me! Forgot Password?