SeamooreLogliner Asked: May 8, 20212021-05-08T16:35:44+10:00 2021-05-08T16:35:44+10:00In: ThrillerAn ex-junky survives a plane crash before losing his company to the FEDS, but to stop the tailspin, he’ll sacrifice his life for his family’s future.Pour The Throttle To It ShareFacebook2 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentJay_Bird 1 Logline 6 Reviews 0 Best Reviews 34 Points View Profile Jay_Bird Penpusher 2021-05-10T08:27:14+10:00Added an answer on May 10, 2021 at 8:27 am The events leading up to the catalyst are super interesting but the Goal/Action is very vague. What does “sacrifice his life” mean? Is he taking on the federal government to get his company back? Is he joining the mafia to get money for his family? Is he performing seppuku to save his families honor? Try focusing less on the catalyst events and more on his goal and why it’s important for his family’s future.Example: After a series of tragic events, a recovering addict and loyal father must take on rogue federal agents to uncover a conspiracy that threatens the happiness and safety of his family.I hope this is helpful! 😀1 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppSeamoore 11 Loglines 7 Reviews 3 Best Reviews 228 Points View Profile Seamoore Logliner 2021-05-13T06:48:13+10:00Added an answer on May 13, 2021 at 6:48 am it does, thank you0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?