Borrowed Time

    In a world where everyone knows the exact time they’ll die, a man becomes a minor celebrity when he manages to avoid his fate, but there are those who want him dead as his life threatens the system.

    Mentor Posted on October 15, 2019 in SciFi.
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      Assuming that the system was 100% accurate, would he be just a minor celebrity? Surely if he’s the only person to avoid death, his name would be known globally? He’d be the next Jesus!

      Who set up the system? The government?

      You said he avoided his fate. Did he simply not die? Or did he actively try and avoid death?

      At what point in the story do you see these things happening? Is the him avoiding death the Act I climax? Or is that a MPR?

      Great title btw. 

      Summitry Answered on October 15, 2019.
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        It’s good, but the last part seems a little ambiguous… I don’t see a reason not to replace “those who want him dead” with something more descriptive.  Also, it’d be nice if it was a little more concrete that the “knowing when you die” is “the system” you refer to.  Maybe something like this?:

        In a world governed by a system that dictates when people will die, a man who famously avoids his fate must escape capture by the system’s enforcers.

        Samurai Answered on October 15, 2019.
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          Agreed with the above. This is interesting.

          The concept needs conflict, and simply avoiding the enforcers doesn’t sound very enticing. More to the point, what is his goal? Keep avoiding them? Until when? What’s the endpoint?

          What if he decides to actively stop the system of death? This way you put him on a path to clash with the big scary folk.

          How about:
          After avoiding his demise in a world of predetermined deaths, a man must fight the system that dictates when people’s time is up.

          Singularity Answered on October 20, 2019.
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