I do not find it credible that someone who is "highly schizophrenic" could ever be selected to become an astronaut. ...
I like the concept. I think the setting is missing in this one. How did the robber and hostage get in the situation. During the get away did he get lost and then captured by a good samaritans or kidnapped by a bad group of people?
I agree. It sort of skips. Not necessarily a bad thing. It could begin with them waking up chained up.
This story seems to have been done already. It’s hard to imagine the imagery here.