Comedic Drama Tv series: When a Nigerian foreign exchange student moves in with a white suburban, American family, cultural differences and close minded town ideals turns the once home, into a house of unrelated individuals

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TomisinA Penpusher Asked on March 16, 2019 in Comedy.
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The Action is still vague. What’s the source of comedy? ..cultural differences and close minded town ideals.. can be replaced with tangible conflict. Currently It reads as-
After moving into white suburbs, a Nigerian exchange student [Conflict] must [Goal]

variable Summitry Reviewed on March 16, 2019.
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In a story, the lead character has a goal.
There is also someone or something standing in the way of that goal.

You should add the lead character’s goal to this logline.

Richiev Singularity Reviewed on March 16, 2019.
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Good start.

Black-white feels old and soft. Is there more to it?  Assuming it’s America, is there any thought of an Arab or Mexican student?

Can’t imagine the parents letting it get so far, they’d end the exchange agreement and arrange for another family to take him, no? It’s not like an adopted child.

Add a paragraph to mention the key characters and their situations.

Is this a one-hour show or half hour? If the latter, any thought about the format…single-camera or multi? This will help with the mental picture and tone.

Robb Ross Samurai Reviewed on March 18, 2019.

Coming from Nigeria the main character won’t be used to American culture. Even though in 3rd person it’s black vs white through the main characters eyes its not as prototypical. He doesn’t understand or conceptualize rascism like the family he lives with and the people in the town. Which in itself causes conflict. Also one hour. The eliment of comedy is in the situation and how far a character arch each person in the family including the student must take. I still want strong plot development not just cheap jokes and easily digestible content

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