Desperate to repair and reunite his dysfunctional family, an idealistic young man brings them to an abandoned island mansion in an attempt to relive his nostalgic childhood vacations, only to discover it overrun by giant carnivorous slugs. (HORROR-COMEDY)

    Samurai Posted on February 21, 2018 in Horror.
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      Who is the lead character? 

      (I only ask this because usually in a movie where a bunch of people are invited to spend the weekend in an old mansion it is one of the guests who’s the lead character)

      Singularity Answered on February 21, 2018.
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        Cool. Pretty much ticks most boxes. My only issue is that id hope his family are bunch of aholes, as who else is going to be fodder for these monsterous slugs in da house?
        Good luck.

        Samurai Answered on February 21, 2018.
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          I have to admit, I love the “…carnivorous slugs…” – it’s weird and original. Find a better description for the MC “…idealistic young man…” means very little in a logline. Give him a genuine flaw and preferably relevant profession such as; arrogant family psychologist.

          If his goal is to reunite the family, make the inciting incident something that relates directly to that. How about; after his parents divorce or after his estranged father returns home.

          I think this has potential, and with a few changes, the logline could read very well.

          Singularity Answered on February 22, 2018.

          Thanks Nir, good suggestions. Glad you liked the slugs! (They are both unique, and easy on the CGI/Special effects budget)

          His profession is real estate photographer, so not sure that’s relevant enough to use in the logline, unless I mention that’s how he discovers the abandoned mansion. In a way that’s the inciting incident because the family is already messed up, although I could put something about how finds his father cheating on his mother. His flaw is that he thinks he can meddle and fix everyone’s lives, but in doing so puts them in danger. I don’t know the appropriate noun to describe this flaw as just calling him a ‘meddler’ might not make sense. Any suggestions?

          on February 23, 2018.
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            It’s just wordy, repair and reunite, is a different look at the same thing. Be as direct as possible.

            Summitry Answered on February 21, 2018.
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