During a wedding rehearsal, a bridesmaid is taken by pirates and becomes the prize of the battle of ego vs revenge between two of the most powerful pirate ships.

    Samurai Posted on March 30, 2018 in Adventure.
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      Who is the lead character?

      Singularity Answered on March 30, 2018.

      Most like the female being fought over by two pirate captains. What happens in between is not important to the logline. Maybe not yet anyway.

      on March 30, 2018.

      I thought the ego vs revenge bit would have given some insight as what was going on and how her part in this was critical.

      on March 30, 2018.
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        Based on your premise (which sounds cool!)

        When a kidnapped bridesmaid becomes the prize in a historic feud between two almighty pirate ships, [this particular protagonist] must [reach this particular goal] or risk her forever

        (Insert your protagonist and his dramatic need)

        Summitry Answered on March 30, 2018.

        I’ve had trouble writing that part. It came across as “revenge” rather than a battle of “who isĀ  the best pirate captain”. I guess I need to dig that up. However the script is taking a turn for the worst. I still have a lot. Beware, magic is involved, but is not the direct line of the story, so putting it in the logline was useless and pointless when it wasn’t a major point.

        on March 30, 2018.
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          In the sequel does Johnny Depp crash the wedding?

          Summitry Answered on March 31, 2018.

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          on March 31, 2018.

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          on March 31, 2018.

          Less comedy, more action. I don’t think Johnny Depp would find this movie appealing to who he is as an actor, but maybe. Funny idea, though.

          on April 1, 2018.
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            Could you fit in when it’s set? Is it now, or in the past? Could slip that information in before “most powerful” in your current logline (e.g – “two of the early 21st century’s/Jacobian era’s/whenever’s most powerful…”)

            Penpusher Answered on March 30, 2018.

            You know the problem I had with that was my creativity went overboard (Haha) and I got an idea of mixing certain elements of the past and present, so it became super difficult to write in a logline. However, I decided to put a firm stance on making it modern day with a bit of flare from the past. Even though, I have to admit, when is time important in a logline?

            on March 30, 2018.

            >>>When is time important in a logline?

            https://logline.it/logline/when-an-adrift-maori-minor-is-stuck-in-state-care-he-must-befriend-a-benevolent-pedophile-to-escape-the-unjust-social-welfare-system-of-the-60s/

            (Although its not quite important in this logline of yours)

            on March 30, 2018.

            Ah ok Leviathan, yeah I see how that would be difficult to get across in a logline (and I like the sound of it!). I agree it’s not normally important but I do think in this case that how I imagine the story if it were set now is drastically different to how I imagine it if it were set in the distant past (due to differences like the status of women, and the nature of piracy).

            on March 30, 2018.

            There is also creative liberties and action fantasy that allows us to write whatever we want, making the story somewhat real and believable and also enjoyable. so that’s how the conflict started as to how to write it.

            on March 30, 2018.
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              What is the protagonist of your story? the pirates? the woman? Why do pirates take the lady? She is special?

              Logliner Answered on May 20, 2018.
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