Bjay12Penpusher Asked: August 2, 20212021-08-02T09:45:01+10:00 2021-08-02T09:45:01+10:00In: HorrorFive delinquents must find a way to survive when they are sent to a behavioural camp run by a sadistic cult. Five delinquents must find a way to survive when they are sent to a behavioural camp run by a sadistic cult. ShareFacebook2 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentOdie 4 Loglines 326 Reviews 33 Best Reviews 1,784 Points View Profile Odie Samurai 2021-08-03T06:32:28+10:00Added an answer on August 3, 2021 at 6:32 am Dig it!Consider the following to strengthen your logline: 1. Anything more to these delinquents? They may just be a motley crew of felonious youths with nothing in common except being forced to this camp – and survive. Any elaborations may help to provide an ironic play on words for your premise. 2. What’s this sadistic cult’s MO – what are they known for? I read once a boot camp that had “fight nights”. 3. A camp destination/location is key for reader orientation. 4. Most camps have a set timeframe, maybe you can use this as your ticking clock devise e.g., “… must survive a three day …” just food for thought.This is what I can see so far: “A group of delinquents must survive a behavioral boot camp ran by a sadistic cult”Hope you found this constructive, keep going!1 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppBjay12 1 Logline 1 Review 0 Best Reviews 20 Points View Profile Bjay12 Penpusher 2021-08-03T08:45:00+10:00Replied to answer on August 3, 2021 at 8:45 am Thank you,Your feedback was very constructive and helpful, I have read back through it a few times. I am considering changing it from five youths to a single protagonist, and from sadistic to demonic cult. These changes also better reflect the story.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?