Five disease research scientists are trapped in their underground laboratory by the containment system after an experimental airborne drug leaks out, only to discover it may have deadly side-effects.

    Samurai Posted on June 9, 2017 in Thriller.
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      In a story a lead character has a goal, your logline has neither a lead character or a goal. It simply presents a situation.

      1: Who is the lead character?
      2: What is their goal
      3: What is standing in the way of the lead character’s ¬†goal?
      4: What must the lead character do about it?

      Singularity Answered on June 9, 2017.

      Great points Richie. That was definitely more of a situational summary, with too much implied.

      How about this version:
      When a leaked airborne pharmaceutical sets off the contamination lockdown system in an underground laboratory, a selfish scientist must get her dysfunctional crew to work together to escape, but they discover the released substance has potentially psychotic side-effects.

      on June 9, 2017.
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        The redraft is better but still too wordy.

        How about:

        After a contamination lockdown traps a team of lab workers, a selfish scientist must lead them all to safety before they all succumb to the psychotic side effects of the virus.

        Singularity Answered on June 11, 2017.
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