Fresh home from war, two brothers must defend their family when one brother’s past comes back to haunt them.

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Default Posted on July 24, 2012 in Public.
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    I find this intriguing, but I ask myself ‘why two brothers and not one ?’ i.e Fresh home from war a young marine has to defend his family when his secret past comes back to haunt him.’ (Excuse my extra words)

    Default Answered on July 24, 2012.
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      I was brainstorming two brothers because the wrong doings of the past are the reason for one brother to lose his life in the film. So the safety of the family is eventually left up to one brother.

      Default Answered on July 24, 2012.
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      The word “past” is a bit squishy and vague … I’m assuming that there is some antagonist from his past that is actually the real danger? Perhaps specify what that is instead?

      Default Answered on July 25, 2012.
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        Wouldn’t that make the logline too long and wordy. Possiblly giving away too much?

        Default Answered on July 25, 2012.
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          Wouldn’t it be easier to relate to a character who has to see and make amends for his own mistakes / accept his own moral flaw / have a revelation about his own way of acting in the world, than for vicariously making amends for another’s mistakes ?

          Default Answered on July 25, 2012.
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            maybe ‘easier’ is the wrong word – more ‘valuable’ to an audience ?

            Default Answered on July 25, 2012.
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              Wouldn’t it also be easy to relate to a character who has to clean up after his brother’s mistakes all through their lives even after death? What if the careless/reckless brother has the revelation about the way he has been living his life only to realize it’s too late and his brother still has to clean his mess up?

              Default Answered on July 25, 2012.
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              Yes, let the brother have the revelation. But that revelation makes him the central character. I think you have to decide who the central character is. Or are they both central characters? Like Training Day ?

              Default Answered on July 26, 2012.
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                That’s what I was leaning toward. Two flawed characters. One more flawed then the other.

                Default Answered on July 26, 2012.
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