Fueled by an encounter with a haunted house, a novice paranormal investigator battles the supernatural for those with nowhere else to turn with her reluctant best friend.

    Logliner Posted on February 23, 2018 in Drama.
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      Feels like a TV show not a film. You have set up a world (TV) and not a story (film).

      A paranormal investigator that helps the desperate finds a woman that ………..

      You have pitched a character not a story. If that is all you have at the moment (which is okay) write a story for them.

      Summitry Answered on February 23, 2018.
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        Fueled by an encounter with a haunted house, a novice paranormal investigator, along with her dubious friend go into the business of purging the world of the supernatural.

        I agree, does feel like a series and not a feature.

        Summitry Answered on February 23, 2018.
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          You were so close to having me hooked! And then you finished with “with her reluctant best friend.”

          Samurai Answered on February 23, 2018.

          Should I take the best friend part out? The friendship between the two is a big part of the show.

          on February 24, 2018.
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            Agreed with the above comments.

            Is this a film or series?

            Singularity Answered on February 23, 2018.
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              I know you have tried quite a few loglines. However, this attempt is a little awkward in its wording.

              “When his brother is killed by an evil spirit, a novice paranormal investigator¬†and his best friend search for clues as to what killed him while helping others struggling with supernatural forces.”

              Singularity Answered on February 23, 2018.

              Um, not sure this pertains to my story line as there is no brother being killed by an evil spirit. It’s about two best friends who decide to offer their paranormal investigating services for hire.

              on February 24, 2018.
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                It is for a television series.

                Logliner Answered on February 24, 2018.
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                  Seeing as this is a series, you’d be better off focusing on the mechanism by which you plan to generate new sources of conflict. What will stand in her way in most episodes? And what does “…battles the supernatural…” mean?

                  Singularity Answered on February 24, 2018.
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                    Shorten?
                    A novice paranormal investigator and her reluctant best friend battle the supernatural for those with nowhere else to turn.

                    Penpusher Answered on February 24, 2018.
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