Lots of detail. Try to streamline it some. I would focus more on who your main character is as an...
(32 words) The Paper Chase
The love story subplot is setup in Act One. It’s the complication that threatens his objective goal. Otherwise there’s no suspense in his struggle. He’s got the chops, the brain bandwidth, the study habits, the resolve to succeed. It’s also the vehicle for working out his character arc (subjective need).
A first year student’s draws ire from his Harvard law professor reprimand on first day of class, Falling in love with the professor’s daughter only complicates his goal of first class honours.
Accept that’s not what happens. The professor has a legendary reputation for ambushing, humiliating 1st year law students. The protagonist is the latest in a long line of victims.