In 1977, a reformed ex-con must return to New York City’s violent underworld in order to save his childhood best friend from a dangerous gangster.
I think this is the best of the loglines that you posted. I understand who’s the lead character, I understand the lead character’s motivation, and I get a feel for what the danger would be.
My only critique would be that it needs a hook.
I have seen movies where a former gangster is pulled back into his former life in order to help someone he cares about.
Carlito’s Way would be a good example of it done right.
What element in your story separates it from other movies of this type?
Another way of looking at the jeopardy is to paint more of the picture since “must return” is a moment, not most of the story. For example, “…must infiltrate a Mafia family in order to find and save…”
>> violent underworld
Both adjectives are redundant. As above, use the space for specifics.
Thanks for the feedback.
What do you think of this one?
When a dangerous mob boss threatens to kill him, a drug dealer lures his childhood best friend, an ex-con struggling to rebuild his life, to help him make 10,000 dollars in one week.
The ex-con is a former drug dealer too but I want to mention he’s been in prison.