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thedarkhorseSamurai
Asked: June 29, 20202020-06-29T22:47:49+10:00 2020-06-29T22:47:49+10:00In: Romance

In a bid to keep his job, a commitment-phobic womanizer seduces his boss’s wholesome daughter, but when she genuinely falls for him, he must continue the charade.

In a bid to keep his job, a commitment-phobic womanizer seduces his boss’s wholesome daughter, but when she genuinely falls for him, he must continue the charade.
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    1. savinh0

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      2020-07-03T20:51:23+10:00Added an answer on July 3, 2020 at 8:51 pm

      Hey darkhorse,

      Sounds for me like a comedy concept. Like you said previously, it could be fun to watch as a sitcom.
      However, I agree with dpg and riechiev: him seducing his daughter seems more likely to upset the boss, so how do you want so solve this?
      And you have to make him really desperate to keep the job. Like he really needs the job to pay off his debt or something similar. That way we can sympathize with him needing the job.

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      2020-07-02T21:50:30+10:00Added an answer on July 2, 2020 at 9:50 pm

      Hi guys. My apologies for a late response. Still getting use to the new format.

      I agree with both points.

      The concept is still quite thin. Very sitcomy. (Think that’s a word.)

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      2020-06-30T15:39:27+10:00Added an answer on June 30, 2020 at 3:39 pm

      Not sure why we are pulling for the lead to succeed

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      2020-06-30T06:56:01+10:00Added an answer on June 30, 2020 at 6:56 am

      How will seducing the wholesome daughter get him on the good side of the boss? Seems like just the opposite would be the case, that the father would be outraged.

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