In a futuristic crime-free world, self-regulated by an omnipotent social media structure, an introspective policeman, re-purposed to chase down individuals who have not met minimum popularity standards, becomes disillusioned with is role and starts a quest for a mystic island where citizen live free from digital coercion.

    Penpusher Posted on August 27, 2019 in SciFi.
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      I am not getting the sense that your MC faces a big challenge. As I see it, he buys a sailboat and sails over the ocean, where at random intervals he stops for provisions and asks the way. While I am sure there is more to your story than that, it is not coming across.

      Mentor Answered on August 27, 2019.
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        Hmm.  The quest seems non-heroic.  The purpose of the quest in myth and drama is not to flee from the woes of the world, but to find a remedy.

        “The hero ventures forth from the world of common day into a region of supernatural; fabulous forces are there encountered and a decisive victory is won; the hero comes back from this mysterious adventure with the power to bestow boons on his fellow man.”  –Joseph Campbell (The Hero with a 1,000 Faces, p 30)


        Singularity Answered on August 27, 2019.
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          good points. Let me rethink this a little.

          Penpusher Answered on August 27, 2019.
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            I like the idea of a  cop who executes warrants for the arrest of people whose total social media scores are too low.  (Although what happens to them: must they do time in social media  re-education/rehabilitation prisons? How far have you worked through the implications of your premise, fleshed out the story world?  Maybe he could be a “re-educator” rather than a cop?)

            Whatever, the  story arc entailed in your premise seems to be that the protagonist should go from being an enforcer in this not-so-brave new world into a rebel, from being a persecutor of the downtrodden to a palladin.

            Singularity Answered on August 28, 2019.
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              My inspiration comes from a mix of Fahrenheit 451 (policemen re-purposed vs. fire fighters in 451) and Logan’s run (i.e. an enforcer in a dystopian world that rebels against its alienation)… but not sure how everything can fall nicely into place… not yet fully satisfied…

              Penpusher Answered on August 28, 2019.
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