There was a grate kingdom who had prosperity and eternity called TreeGlow Kingdom (Medieval Era), but in a small distance there was a volcano called Dark Peak,
in this volcano lived a dragon, this dragon was called GORVITH (Meaning: Lord of fire)
but this dragon did not stayed in there, the dragon came out and destroyed everything he could, the king -Alrik Angevin- did he’s best at protecting the kingdom,
but there was something that protected them before him, the gem of eternity, that gem makes the kingdom last forever.
The son of the king, the prince, was a kid in that time
he suffered because of the painful death of his mother, the queen.
The kingdom survived.
The king and the generals rebuilt the kingdom, and in 20 years all was back to
normal, but the dragon did not died so the mistery and the war did not finished.
The dragon wanted the eternity gem to complete the power of the 6 essential gems: the Eternity gem, the Life gem, Death gem, the Peace gem, the War gem and Justice gem.
Ninann22
Hi,
I like we’re you’re heading with the story. I get it’s a fantasy, and a kingdom that needs saved. However, there are some parts that are missing and hard to understand. After reading your summary it was a little clearer. This site has a Logline formula I recommend using or this helps me as well.
Protagonist + inciting incident + central conflict + protagonist goal.
Does not have to be in that exact order, but it ensures you get those main elements in the logline.
Here is my example
When a evil dragon threatens a kingdom, a skittish prince must defeat it before it gains ultimate power and destroy’s everything in its path.
You want to simplify it and get to the point. Don’t use specific names. The rules or the backstory is not known so it has to understandable for everyone. See what works for you then go from there. I hope this helps. Keep up the hard work.
Abdi07
Thanks for your advice! I will do what you told me 😀