PackgrlPenpusher Posted: October 11, 20192019-10-11T15:07:55+10:00 2019-10-11T15:07:55+10:00In: Coming of AgeWhen she allows her husband’s overdose, a neglectful young mother must embark on a journey of recovery or risk losing her children to the system forever.– ShareFacebook5 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentMike Pedley United Kingdom (UK) 66 Loglines 618 Reviews 99 Best Reviews 50,952 Points View ProfileBest Answer Mike Pedley Singularity 2019-10-11T17:49:11+10:00Added an answer on October 11, 2019 at 5:49 pm Recovery from what? Being neglectful? or the guilt of allowing her husband’s overdose?What does this journey of recovery look like on screen? Is it an emotional journey? Or a physical one (road trip?)? Film is a visual medium so it’s good to use a visual goal to represent emotional goals. 0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppPackgrl 1 Loglines 1 Review 1 Best Answer 61 Points View ProfileBest Answer Packgrl Penpusher 2019-10-11T19:29:03+10:00Added an answer on October 11, 2019 at 7:29 pm Thanks for your suggestions0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 61 Loglines 3,389 Reviews 307 Best Reviews 81,369 Points View ProfileBest Answer Richiev Singularity 2019-10-12T06:20:08+10:00Added an answer on October 12, 2019 at 6:20 am I think the idea is solid but the opening line needs to be changed because people are responsible for their own sobriety, so I don’t understand how she could ‘allow’ her husband to overdose.“When her husband’s overdose wakes her up, an addicted mother enters rehab determined that her children won’t lose their mom as well”0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppNeer Shelter 23 Loglines 2,878 Reviews 260 Best Reviews 55,444 Points View ProfileBest Answer Nir Shelter Singularity 2019-10-12T11:59:45+10:00Added an answer on October 12, 2019 at 11:59 am If she has custody over her children already, she is trying to keep the status quo as is. However, if she were to have lost custody over them, she would need to fight to get them back.What if the inciting event is her children being taken away, and her goal is getting them back?For example: After an addict loses her children to the state, she must kick the habit to get them back.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppHannahB 1 Loglines 2 Reviews 2 Best Reviews 51 Points View ProfileBest Answer HannahB Penpusher 2020-06-01T12:11:58+10:00Added an answer on June 1, 2020 at 12:11 pm I would suggest adding urgency or a timeframe for losing her children.? Like a court date or an order from the court.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?