"Mamie Marchbanks, seventeen and oh so sassy, is a performer. She performs with circuses, Mexican travelling players and Mack Sennett, but her father and his bounty hunter are in pursuit."

Trick Riding Mamie

Penpusher Posted on April 9, 2012 in No Category.
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“A young sassy circus performer on the run is pursued by her father.”

Why? While bounty hunter implies criminal activity, here there is the possibility he wants her because….? She inherited her mother’s fortune and he needs to get her under his control to get to it? She ran away with knowledge in regards to his illegal business activities? Because he loves her and wants to find her before some one else does? Again, because?

I googled “Mexican Traveling Players,” and it came up with soccer teams. Do you mean a Mexican troupe of traveling actors? Is she Mexican?

Default Answered on April 13, 2012.
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No hook as to why she’s running.  Don’t use names. And like above Mexican Traveling Players clarify what they are??  What kind of performer? Biggest need is why is she running .  Who is the antagonist? Might be tied to why she’s running.

Logliner Answered on May 14, 2017.
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