After taking human form, getting married, and having a child of his own, the ancient child eating (though newly reformed) Boogeyman must protect his oblivious human family when he suspects a new monster may lurking under the bed of his son….planning to out the horrible secret of his past life.

    Coming Out Of The Closet

    Penpusher Posted on January 10, 2015 in Public.
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      “When he discovers a monster living under his son’s bed, a former Boogyman turned loving husband must protect his son from the very creature who took his place.”

      Singularity Answered on January 11, 2015.
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        I like that revision, but I thought it should be important to note in the log line that 1) the boogeyman has turned human and 2) his human family are unaware that he was the boogeyman and that he has eaten many children. Should I just drop that from the log line? Too much detail?

        Penpusher Answered on January 11, 2015.
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          When a rehabilitated Boogeyman turned loving family man discovers a Boogeyman living under his son’s bed, he must protect him from the kind of creature he once was.

          That his family is unaware is part of the story, but I don’t think it is necessary for the logline. The focal point of the story is not that they don’t know about his past, but that, ironically, he must protect his family from the kind of creature he used to be.

          Singularity Answered on January 11, 2015.
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            I didn’t get the “becoming human”, taking form for me is like wearing a mask, you can change back. I think the “reformed” statement isn’t needed. To become human I assumed he had somehow changed his ways. The last sentence nearly reduces tension. Just having a boogeyman under the bed is bad enough, we all know what that can mean.

            Singularity Answered on January 11, 2015.
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              Good concept by the way. Has space to breath.

              Singularity Answered on January 11, 2015.
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