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    Trapped in a small rural town cut off by bushfire closing in, an ex-convict biker accompanied by his blind mother has to protect her and himself against rage of local Christian sect members forced to give them shelter by authorities. Amidst inferno of destroyed houses, livestock, and crops, he has to fight for survival facing hatred and love of two men from the sect – his estranged father, its supreme leader, who he was searching for his whole life not knowing his dad hid his birth as a dirty secret, and his twin brother he never knew existed.

    Penpusher Posted on December 8, 2018 in Drama.
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      When a massive fire forces him and his mother to seek shelter in a small town, an ex-convict must… (Then tell us what he must do. Escape? Kill his father? Get to the authorities?)

      Singularity Answered on December 8, 2018.

      The idea here is that they travelled both through a town not knowing they were approaching the bushfire, which then cuts them off and leaves them stuck on the sect grounds that aren’t happy seeing the strangers from outer world, only then recognizing the mother and the son as related to the supreme leader.

      on December 8, 2018.

      A good set up. However, what do they do next?

      Once they are trapped in the town with the supreme leader, what is the lead character’s plan for getting out of the bad situation?

      on December 10, 2018.

      Need to think it through, thank you. How do you post updated version, BTW. As a new post/question? Thank you for your time.

      on December 11, 2018.
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        It’s an interesting concept and I can see you have a good idea on what you want your screenplay to be about. However, the length can be shortened and you have some unnecessary details that you don’t have to squeeze in there. Also, I’m looking at it and can’t seem to figure out your main goal for your protagonist. Is it to protect himself and his mother or face the issue head on?

        Penpusher Answered on December 10, 2018.

        I agree it needs work condensing it, thank you. I’d say the initial goal is to protect his mother, but I’m not sure how in this light to reflect the higher goal of reuniting his family taking the brother away from the cast – whilst escaping the fire closing in altogether. Needs some good thinking through.

        on December 11, 2018.
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