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mlenyesoePenpusher
Posted: May 12, 20202020-05-12T14:13:33+10:00 2020-05-12T14:13:33+10:00In: Drama

Post suicide attempt, an intensely self-analytical young woman stumbles through the reality of living when she expected to be dead, whilst wryly reflecting on how her time in a military academy led her there.

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    1. Odie Samurai
      2020-05-16T13:20:28+10:00Added an answer on May 16, 2020 at 1:20 pm

      It sounds interesting mlenyesoe, but a couple of questions please:

      • Did she attempt suicide while she was in the academy? Her being in a war is not in your logline, so it sounds like the academy broke her?
      • What would we watch for the majority of your script?
        This is what I can ?see? so far:
        ACT 1: She is in trouble > She attempts suicide > She contemplates about what led her to that point.
        ACT II: What?s next? As you can see ?stumbles through the reality of living? is vague.
      • What is her goal? To get help for PTSD and have a family? To get revenge for the academy’s wrongdoing?
      • What is her opposition or conflict? Her disease? A drill Sargent?
      • What are the stakes in your story? What happens if she doesn?t get help does she kill or finally kill herself?

      Hope this helps.

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