Reeling from the loss of their eldest son to the war, a family welcomes the company of a mysterious soldier claiming to fulfill a promise to a fallen comrade.

    Penpusher Posted on April 5, 2019 in Thriller.
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      Since the promise seems to be important to the story, what is the promise the soldier is vowing to keep?

      Singularity Answered on April 5, 2019.

      Please clarify– are you asking or suggesting I insert that in the logline?

      on April 5, 2019.

      Kind of depends on how long of an explanation it would take. If it’s simple then I would add it to the logline because being specific is better than not.

      on April 5, 2019.
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        This sounds very similar to the plot of The Guest.

        I would recommend having one protagonist whose perspective we see this story from. Give us the logline from this character’s perspective. 

        Inciting incident – what is the incident that throws the protagonist’s life upside down? I’m assuming that, since it’s a thriller, something dramatic happens that kick starts the real story.

        Goal – when we have a protagonist, give them a clear visual goal that is their answer to the question posed by the inciting incident. 

        Summitry Answered on April 5, 2019.
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          Since this logline is a little vague in parts, some specifics might differentiate this from The Guest. Or there’s room to change parts that give the whole a fresh feel, like a female protag, another kind of family, etc.

          Mentor Answered on April 6, 2019.
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            Who is the main character? The father? The mother? Or the returned soldier?

            Singularity Answered on April 7, 2019.
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