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Asked: April 18, 20182018-04-18T00:06:51+10:00 2018-04-18T00:06:51+10:00In: Coming of Age

shipped to grandpa’s village for vacation, a city brat must find how to enjoy his summer

title: simmer summer

On his journey to appreciate what really matters, he makes grandpa enjoy his city mayhem! (the fun and games section)

It was his grandpa who requested to meet him. After their chemistry develops in the first half, his grandpa’s health declines. (Taking care of him completes his rites of passage)

the plot then turns him to face grandpa’s illness at the midpoint (should I suggest this in the logline?)

there’s a debate between grandpa and his papa to move in with him; to take better care of him
but grandpa’s not ready to leave. It gets hard for grandma on her own.

It’s new age + comedy + adventure

for subplot — A tech crippled teen shipped off to his grandpa’s village for summer (has one month to find “interesting” photographs for school competition in this “boring” neighborhood)???

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    1. dpg

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      2018-04-18T08:19:28+10:00Added an answer on April 18, 2018 at 8:19 am

      All the snap, crackle and pop in your premise is in your comment.? Put some of it in the logline.

      fwiw

       

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      2018-04-18T11:57:05+10:00Added an answer on April 18, 2018 at 11:57 am

      “When his parents declare he is too addicted to being online, a technology addicted kid is sent to the country to live with his grandfather; no cell phones allowed.”

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      2018-04-18T22:00:57+10:00Added an answer on April 18, 2018 at 10:00 pm

      I really like Richiev’s version.? And I suggest pushing the concept further.

      What if? his? grandfather is an un-beloved, ornery,? old goat who lives miles from town on a small cattle ranch? in the West?? And he lives totally off the grid — no electricity, no phone, no wireless coverage?

      Th kid is sent there for the summer not only? to “cure”? his online addiction? but also to work for his grandfather whose health is declining.? So? the kid? has to to help him by herding cattle,? harvesting hay, building fences, riding horses, etc.? About all of which he is clueless.

      This is a summer with? less than a zero possibility of fun.? Living off the grid is his version of hell.

      Whatever.? My point is, put the urban savvy kid in a situation where in every possible way, he is a fish out of water.? Compelled against his will to? live with a person whom he initially thinks is the last person in the world — in the galaxy, in the universe –he could possibly bond with.

      fwiw

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