motivationdocPenpusher Asked: December 9, 20192019-12-09T02:11:22+10:00 2019-12-09T02:11:22+10:00In: RomanceSix unknowingly linked and naive characters in, Edinburgh and London, struggle to find love in their stormy relationships before it is too late.– ShareFacebook3 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentKarel Segers 8 Loglines 72 Reviews 11 Best Reviews 2,616 Points View Profile Karel Segers Samurai 2019-12-09T09:29:44+10:00Added an answer on December 9, 2019 at 9:29 am In the hands of the right writer/director, this could be an interesting picture, but the logline doesn’t sell it. Multi-protagonist is hard to pull off as it is, so I’m afraid SIX undefined characters is a little much. Also, why two cities? And what does ‘before it is too late’ mean?My first advice would be to focus on ONE character in the logline, so you can give us detail and depth.(I have taken the liberty to fix the punctuation.)0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppdpg 105 Loglines 5,557 Reviews 556 Best Reviews 112,194 Points View Profile dpg Singularity 2019-12-10T01:52:40+10:00Added an answer on December 10, 2019 at 1:52 am As Karel said.? Although in romances, where plots usually pivot on a relationship, a logline focusing on dual protagonists may work.Also I suggest “before it is too late” needs clarification.? Too late for what?? Like, is a female’s biological click ticking?? Or…?0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 64 Loglines 3,473 Reviews 306 Best Reviews 81,779 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2019-12-10T05:06:10+10:00Added an answer on December 10, 2019 at 5:06 am This logline seems to be written from the outside looking in, instead of from the characters point of view.As a result, the logline comes across impersonal and as Karel said, the logline doesn’t sell (The Story) 0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?