Spiritually gifted twins seek revenge against their evil cyborg uncle as they race to find fabled elemtental orbs.

GeneSalvitti Logliner Asked 5 days ago in SciFi.
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Gene, you keep rewriting this yet miss something.

Spiritual doesn’t add much as an adjective to your protagonist. Give them something more. Is this their special powers? If so, what exactly are they?

Spirit vs evil cyborg? My money is on cyborg to win. What did this uncle cyborg do to them?

Then you throw in orbs for no clear reason. Do they need to orbs to defeat the cyborg? If so, mention that.

Focus this plot finer.

Foxtrot25 Mentor Reviewed 4 days ago.
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