To save the Tree of Life from the ever encroaching shadow, a girl must learn to once again trust in humanity. The very people that wiped out her entire kingdom.

    Penpusher Posted on June 18, 2018 in Fantasy.
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      Goal: Save the Tree of life
      Action: Learn to trust humanity

      How is that shown on screen? 
      Is it two hours of your lead character saying, “I will trust humanity, I will trust humanity?”
      Maybe she reads some books on the good side of the human race.

      Also, how will learning to trust humanity (Supposing she succeeds) translate to saving the tree of life?

      Singularity Answered on June 18, 2018.

      This is a actually an issue that I’ve been having with the story for a while (and just recently solved!) The way I have a feeling it’s going to play out, is she discovers the bodies of several of her people, and the human character comforts her while she grieves. Even after she’s been exceedingly mean to him for the first half of the movie. As for the threat to the tree of life? The girl was born and raised among a race of people whose soul purpose is to protect Yggdrasil against “Netheria” monsters. Basically shadow demons that want to destroy everything in their path. And now that humanity has wiped out the guardians, the Netheria are coming closer and closer to destroying the tree. The girl is doing everything she can, but she won’t be able to stop the monsters, unless she gets help; and considering she’s the last of her people, the only beings she can turn to are the ones she doesn’t trust. However, she knows that if the tree falls mankind will never stand a chance against the Netheria, and the monsters will consume the world.

      on June 20, 2018.
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        How does trust humanity look like? That is the conclusion the audience will draw. So how will you demonstrate that? Does she have to trust a person, which would be an allegory for humanity? Loglines tend to display plot as a way of showing emotion.

        Summitry Answered on June 18, 2018.
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          Some good points from CraigDGriffiths and Richiev. Also it’s not 100% clear what the inciting incident of  your story is. What is the “ever encroaching shadow”? Could it already be infected, ie wilting, and therefore show to the audience that something has happened?

          Samurai Answered on June 18, 2018.
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            “When the shadow engulfs a neighbouring farm, the forest nymph must save the tree of life, overcoming her distrust in humans”
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            But why should she?

            A similar premise took place in Miyazaki’s “Princess Mononoke (1997)”. What makes your plot unique?

            Also, the stakes aren’t clear.
            What if the Tree falls?
            aka., what’s her dramatic need? As a result of which, what becomes her objective-visual-goal?

            Good Luck!!

            Summitry Answered on June 18, 2018.

            * Nymph is one of a numerous class of lesser deities of mythology, conceived of as beautiful maidens inhabiting the sea, rivers, woods, trees, mountains, meadows, etc., and frequently mentioned as attending a superior deity, which could be the tree spirit

            on June 18, 2018.
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