thedarkhorseMentor Posted: November 7, 20192019-11-07T20:57:23+10:00 2019-11-07T20:57:23+10:00In: Family Trapped in his old hometown during a snowstorm, a charming con artist must spend Christmas with a dysfunctional family ? and unexpectedly finds the family he never had. – Share Facebook 5 Reviews Voted Oldest Recent thedarkhorse 98 Loglines 252 Reviews 14 Best Reviews 6,219 Points View Profile thedarkhorse Mentor 2019-11-07T21:11:22+10:00Added an answer on November 7, 2019 at 9:11 pm Okay… Unique hook/twist – he falls for the family! The worst thing to happen to him – spending time with this family/trapped in his old hometown. Odd couples – charming con artist and wholesome woman. Fish out of water. Interesting inciting event – trapped in old hometown! Snowstorm! The ultimate (blank) from hell – the dysfunctional family. Time limit/ticking clock? – (Christmas! Also, it won’t be snowing forever.) Dilemma – con artist finds the family he never had and is lying to them. 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp Mike Pedley United Kingdom (UK) 66 Loglines 612 Reviews 99 Best Reviews 50,936 Points View Profile Mike Pedley Singularity 2019-11-07T21:56:24+10:00Added an answer on November 7, 2019 at 9:56 pm I like where this is going! It’s the sort of Christmas film I would watch. When you have a con-artist, you need a con. What’s his con that he’s playing on the family? Is he pretending to be a family member in a bid to get food and a bed to sleep in? The inciting incident is whatever happened that led him to have to spend Christmas with this family (food and a bed?). I would use another characteristic other than charming. Con-artist’s are (probably?) mostly charming… in my head it goes with the territory. Plus, it doesn’t really give him an arc and in this sort of Christmas family film, a strong feel good message is essential. Why his hometown? He’s not really a fish out of water if he’s in the place he spent his youth. When a blizzard traps him in a small town without any money, a selfish con-artist must convince a dysfunctional family that he is a long lost relative to get food and a bed over the Christmas holidays. I’d love it if the climax of the film was the family knowing he wasn’t a relative all along, but since it was Christmas, they took him in. Have you seen We’re No Angels? Highly recommend it if not. Similar premise starring Humphrey Bogart, Aldo Ray, and Peter Ustinov. ? ? 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp dpg 105 Loglines 5,509 Reviews 554 Best Reviews 111,800 Points View Profile dpg Singularity 2019-11-07T23:53:36+10:00Added an answer on November 7, 2019 at 11:53 pm I think he needs an objective goal related to his “trade” and character.? Like doing what he does best: the family that befriends him is the mark for his latest con. But then a snowstorm traps him at the scene of his latest crime.? Consequently, there’s more dramatic tension. 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp thedarkhorse 98 Loglines 252 Reviews 14 Best Reviews 6,219 Points View Profile thedarkhorse Mentor 2019-11-08T05:29:07+10:00Added an answer on November 8, 2019 at 5:29 am A few more… 1. Trapped in his old hometown during a snowstorm, a con artist swindles a family into spending Christmas with him, whilst cops are on his tail. 2. Not wanting to be alone over the holidays, a con artist seduces a sweet wholesome woman, but must first spend time with her family, whom he grows attached to. I can’t figure out whether his main goal/macro intention is to get out of there (and thus get to a locker filled with money) or to not be alone over Christmas. The Inciting Incident – he’s on his way to locker of money. His car breaks down. Mechanics say two days. Snow storm happens as well. (The cops on his tail was going to happen later.) Anyways – not wanting to be alone in a motel room, he seduces our heroine (the sweet wholesome woman). And in order to spend time with her, he must spend time with her weird dysfunctional family, whom he grows to love. He then spends a good chunk of time pretending to be something he’s not. And then the cops are on his tail… 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp Richiev 61 Loglines 3,388 Reviews 307 Best Reviews 81,365 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2019-11-08T09:18:37+10:00Added an answer on November 8, 2019 at 9:18 am Just so you know, there is a very similar Nicholas Cage movie called “Trapped in Paradise” I don’t think it will make too much of a difference, and your movie will be able to stand on its own, but you should know it’s out there. 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp You must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Captcha* Remember Me! Forgot Password?