A mercenary teams up with a prince to rescue a princess who was kidnapped by her father who is an evil emperor.

    Penpusher Posted on March 2, 2020 in SciFi.
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      • Since the objective goal belongs to the emperor’s daughter,
        hence this should be written with her as the protagonist
      • To invade pertains to intrusive entrance; one must be unearthly, to invade earth.
      • What’s standing in her way seems missing. What prevents her from stopping her father?
      • Is the action ‘teams up to stop her father from invading earth… set in action by when a prince falls
        for an emperor’s daughter
        or the rivalry between these families..? if not, these can be dropped out

      Good luck

      Summitry Answered on March 3, 2020.
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        I revised it.

        Penpusher Answered on March 3, 2020.
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          Two childhood friends, including a mercenary and a prince falls in love with each other in space until they decide to stop an evil emperor from having the town being invaded by aliens

          • a mercenary and a prince.. who is your protagonist?
          • ‘falling in love’ should not be confused as the inciting incident.
            It doesn’t bring the story into action. Think of a specific event which makes her go against the emperor
            OR think what’s at stake. She’s in outer space, what does she have to lose with this invasion?
          Summitry Answered on March 3, 2020.
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            I’m done.

            Penpusher Answered on March 4, 2020.
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