Imprisoned by a cannibalistic backwoods family, two runaway bank robbers must team up with their own hostages – to get out alive and with their money.

    Mentor Posted on November 14, 2019 in Horror.

    Not sure about the “must”.

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      ORIGINAL LOGLINE: Two wanted bank robbers must team up with their hostages when they become prisoners to cannibalistic hillbillies.

      INTENTION: on the run/wanted/to be free/to get out with the money and their lives.
      OBSTACLE: trapped/ facing an evil far worse than them.

      Original logline:

      Two wanted criminals on the run from New Mexico must team up with their hostages when they come across cannibalistic hillbillies in the backwoods of Texas.

      -Chopped off the locations. Not needed.

      -Made them bank robbers so you know they want to get out with the money.

      – “To come across” is too vague. We need to know they will become trapped.

      Another logline/a bit more vague:

      Two criminals must team up with their hostages to survive an escalating ordeal with backwoods cannibals.

       

       

      Mentor Answered on November 14, 2019.
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        I’ll try this again…

        When they are taken prisoner by a cannibalistic backwoods family, two runaway bank robbers must team up with their own hostages – in order to get out alive and with their money.

         

        Mentor Answered on November 14, 2019.
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          I’ll chop that down too…

          Imprisoned by a cannibalistic backwoods family, two runaway bank robbers must team up with their own hostages – to get out alive and with their money.

          Working title: CAPTIVES.

          Mentor Answered on November 14, 2019.
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