Penpusher Posted on November 6, 2019 in Adventure.
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      I don’t think you have to mess too much with his logline:

      “When a hesitant forest ranger is kidnapped by a sasquatch, she escapes the beast only to be hunted by both the creature and a secretive government agency out to kill them both.”

      Singularity Answered on November 6, 2019.


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        Sounds like fun! I like this idea!

        I think Richiev’s version highlights the goal of escaping the Sasquatch and the government agency which I think is more important than simply escaping the wilderness (she’s a forest ranger… surely this is where she’s most comfortable?).

        My only query is why does the government agency want to kill her? I think that maybe needs to hinted at. I’m guessing it’s to keep the Sasquatch’s existence under wraps but I think that motive is important to understanding the story.

        Summitry Answered on November 6, 2019.

        I agree. Thanks for the feedback.
        The government agency is trying to remove the sasquatches from that area, whether it be by relocation or elimination. When she finds out, the agency tries to kill her.

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          A forest ranger must escape the Oregon wilderness whilst hunted by a sasquatch and the government operatives out to eliminate them both.

          – trying to be as lean as possible for your query.

          Protagonist – who must (goal) – or else (disaster will happen if she doesn’t succeed).

          or using another formula (as I believe we shouldn’t constantly conform to just one formula.)

          1. Who the story is about.
          2. What they strive for.
          3. What stands in her way (antagonistic force/stakes).

          Good luck Kendra.

          Mentor Answered on November 6, 2019.

          Thank you. I appreciate your input. I am working on breaking down the basics again as a result.

          on November 8, 2019.
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