When a king finds a strong fierce woman to be his queen, he must fight to protect from his adversary, a royal woodsman, who wants to dethrone him and keep him from having an heir.

Leviathan Samurai Asked on March 16, 2019 in Drama.
Add Comment
3 Review(s)

Since the event (finding her) isn’t the source of his goal (to fight the woodsman), you are missing out on the inciting incident.

variable Summitry Reviewed on March 16, 2019.
Add Comment

You should put the queen in danger
“When the queen is kidnapped by a malicious woodsman, a former adventurer turned king must once again strap on his sword in order to save his love from the vengeance-minded woodcutter.”
Or perhaps switch it around where the king is kidnapped and the fierce queen goes on an adventure to save him.

Richiev Singularity Reviewed on March 16, 2019.

can trim “..by a malicious woodsman..”

on March 16, 2019.

Even better, great advice!

on March 16, 2019.

The queen is technically in danger. A lot more than I can mention. However, she is not the twist or incident. Anything that happens to her is closer towards another part of the script.

The king chooses a queen, before and after which, the woodsman (The rival/adversary) takes his chance to dethrone the king to take over the kingdom.

on March 17, 2019.
Add Comment

What is a royal woodsman? Seems contradictory. Woodsmen are usually….er…woody. Royalty usually doesn’t concern themselves with back-breaking work like cutting wood.  Would make sense  if the woodsman was a wood elf.

You could make the adversary a miner. Hide her in the mines. Or a pirate, hide her away on his boat or an island. Or the town baker who is secretly a mage, hide her away in a portable hole.

SSalvatore Samurai Reviewed on March 18, 2019.
Add Comment

Your Review

By posting your answer, you agree to the privacy policy and terms of service.