When a local library begins shredding it’s books due to the popularity of e-readers, a limited edition copy of Macbeth must lead his Shakespearean archive to safety at the National Archive before they’re shredded too.

    Logliner Posted on May 5, 2016 in Family.
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      When a provincial library pulps its books in favor of e-readers, Henry V must lead the other plays in a rare collection of Shakespeare to safety in the British Museum.
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      Notes:
      I suggest Henry V instead of Macbeth  because the mature “Hank” was Shakespeare’s model for kingship. And then you can buddy Henry  with Falstaff, as a trickster character, for comic relief.

      Minor quibble:  National Archives are for government documents, not literature. [If the setting is in the U.S., their destination would be the Library of Congress].  Of course, one of the complications could be that they set out for the wrong location.

      Yes, I think this concept has legs especially if the gimmick is that each play reflects the defining characteristic of its title or salient characters.  Hamlet is indecisive, can’t make up his mind whether to go or not to go. …  Julius Caesar and Richard III think they should lead the literary expedition. .  Lacy Macbeth nags her husband to man up, and take charge…  Antony just wants to shack up somwhere with Cleopatra…    Romeo & Juliet must struggle to keep the truce, stop their supporting cast from feuding in sword fights…  Prospero thinks the solution to every complication along the way is sorcery…

      “This is very midsummer madness.”

      Singularity Answered on May 6, 2016.
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        Thanks for your feedback dpg, your version of the logline is shorter and more efficient. The idea was indeed to have each play reflect the characteristics of their titles.

        Logliner Answered on May 6, 2016.
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          Interesting premise but the wording didn’t work for me. I did not make the leap of logic to understand that “…must lead his…” referred to either the book or character within.
          As a fantasy comedy it can work but the descriptions need re thinking.

          Singularity Answered on May 6, 2016.
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            Thanks Nir, 100% agree the wording doesn’t really work, it’s clumsy and too long. dpg hit the nail on the head with his version of the logline. Just wanted to road test the concept in itself.

            Logliner Answered on May 6, 2016.
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              My only caveat is the challenge of the target audience.   Kids aren’t going to pick up on and appreciate the references to characters and plots in Shakespeare’s plays.  The trick is to do what Pixar does so well, tell a story that  plays on two levels, entertaining kids while appealing to adults.

              Good luck with the story.

              Singularity Answered on May 6, 2016.
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                Great point dpg. Thank you.

                Logliner Answered on May 6, 2016.
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                  I’d try not to use the word archive twice. i really like this premise, it feels that since MC is limited edition he feels he’s entitled to lead the pack.

                  Samurai Answered on May 7, 2016.
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