When a man wakes up in an unfamiliar bar with no memories, he is compelled to solve the mystery and reconsider his own relationship with death.

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    Logliner Posted on January 3, 2020 in Examples.
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      When a man wakes up with no memories in the world where people interact through a game of Rock. Paper. Scissors. , he must solve the mystery of his predicament and consider his relationship with death.

      Logliner Answered on January 7, 2020.
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        So, Memento? Also I’m struggling with “relationship with death”… doesn’t really mean anything to me on its own.

        Penpusher Answered on January 3, 2020.
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          A couple of thoughts I hope are useful:

          • Do you need ‘unfamiliar’ bar if he’s lost his memory?
          • ‘his own relationship with death’ sounds like the emphasis is on ‘own’ – if so, why? Who else is there? And how does getting his memory back relate to his mortality?
          Samurai Answered on January 7, 2020.

          Good notes, thank you.

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            When a man wakes up in world where people communicate through a game of Rock, Paper, Scissors, he is compelled to solve the mystery and reconsider his relationship with death.

            Logliner Answered on January 7, 2020.

            You’ve lost the element of him having no memory in this version – maybe “When an amnesiac wakes up…”

            To me, it’s more vague than previously:

            • How can you communicate through R,P,S game?
            • What’s the mystery?  His memory loss or how you can communicate through R,P,S?
            • “reconsider his relationship with death” – what was his previous relationship with death?  Is this lower case ‘death’ or ‘Death’ personified?
            • What’s his goal – to get his memory back?  If so, how will he do it?
            on January 7, 2020.
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              >>>Consider his relationship with  death?

              Vague, needs clarity. Specifically, what does that mean in terms of what he must do?

              And a plot is organized around one prime objective goal.  Not two.  Just one.  A logline is about the struggle to achieve that one goal. All other goals are secondary and subordinate to the prime goal — and extraneous to a loglne.

              So what is his singular primary goal: solve the mystery or “consider his relationship with death” (whatever that means)?

               

              And does this refer to a movie already made?  Because that’s what  “examples” are for.

               

              Singularity Answered on January 9, 2020.
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                Does refer to the movie already made.

                “When a man wakes up with no memories in the world where people interact through a game of Rock. Paper. Scissors. , he must solve the mystery of his predicament.”

                Logliner Answered on January 9, 2020.

                And the movie is…?

                on January 10, 2020.
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