SteeldownunderPenpusher Posted: July 19, 20202020-07-19T10:58:21+10:00 2020-07-19T10:58:21+10:00In: ThrillerWhen a persistent novice realtor discovers her condescending boss is bankrolling his fancy lifestyle using client escrow funds, she hires an investigator to dig deeper, but he catches on and hires a hit-man to silence her.Another try on my original log-line.Title: Whistle While She Works ShareFacebook4 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentRichiev 62 Loglines 3,403 Reviews 303 Best Reviews 81,554 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2020-07-19T17:07:25+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2020 at 5:07 pm “When her boss hires a hitman after she discovers he’s embezzled millions, a novice realtor, must survive the assassination attempts while searching for the smoking gun that will put her boss away.”1 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppScott Danzig 20 Loglines 89 Reviews 6 Best Reviews 2,039 Points View Profile Scott Danzig Samurai 2020-07-19T19:56:28+10:00Replied to answer on July 19, 2020 at 7:56 pm I think this reads a bit better:When she discovers her boss has embezzled millions, a novice realtor must evade his hitman while searching for the smoking gun that will put him away.1 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppSteeldownunder 2 Loglines 2 Reviews 0 Best Reviews 21 Points View Profile Steeldownunder Penpusher 2020-07-19T18:34:21+10:00Replied to answer on July 19, 2020 at 6:34 pm Hi Richiev, Nicely done, that’s a great way to look at it. I had not thought of that angle; it works! thank you! ‘Steeldownunder1 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppMike Pedley United Kingdom (UK) 67 Loglines 651 Reviews 102 Best Reviews 51,084 Points View Profile Mike Pedley Singularity 2020-07-19T20:11:22+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2020 at 8:11 pm Richiev’s and Scott’s versions work well. Only thing I’d consider changing is giving her a characteristic that suggests an arc for her.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?