When a Texas cotton farmer’s land stops yielding crops, he teams up with an old friend to distribute VHS pornography tapes; leaving his family and slipping into a world of depravity and greed to become the undisputed King of Pornography in Texas. (1980)

    Penpusher Posted on May 2, 2019 in Noir.
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      The idea is solid. I’d be interested in seeing this movie. But it fails to have the necessary elements of a successful logline. For one, there’s no conflict. There’s a problem and he solves it. Whatever the main conflict is needs to be what your logline focuses on. For example: When a Texas cotton farmer’s land stops yielding crops, he struggles for a new source of income, unwittingly falling into the distribution of pornography.

      Which leads me to the second problem with this logline. You gave away the ending. You should never give away the ending if you want a producer to read the script. If the Sixth Sense logline was: “A psychiatrist struggles to help a young boy who sees dead people, and it turns out the psychiatrist was dead the whole time” it never would’ve sold.

      Penpusher Answered on May 2, 2019.

      Is that right? I would have thought M Knight would have sold his script based on his great twist, otherwise you kind of just have a boy seeing ghosts. But I’m new to this loglining so really asking out of naïveté.

      on May 3, 2019.

      Yes well revealing the ending in the logline can be easily changed.  But yes i agree that there is the issue of limited conflict. Something i will have to look into further.  But

      on May 8, 2019.
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        Does the lead character have a goal? Something the audience can relate to?

        In other words, what does the lead character want?

        Singularity Answered on May 2, 2019.

        My thoughts where that his goal was initially to provide for his family, however as he becomes hooked into the world he starts to produce his own pornography and become romantically involved with the actresses. He gradually loses sight of his goal to provide for his family and wants to become the Porn King in Texas.

        on May 8, 2019.
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          Is this based upon  by a real life character?

          Singularity Answered on May 2, 2019.

          No, fictional.

          on May 8, 2019.
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            Does his goal become getting back with his family?

            Samurai Answered on May 3, 2019.

            My idea was that his initial goal was to provide for his family, however as he falls into this new world of pornography his goal changes, and he desires to be the king of pornography in Texas.

            on May 8, 2019.
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              Agree with the others. As well, clarify if it’s production and not just distribution because it’s hard to see depravity with the latter. With depravity, greed becomes secondary or an assumed part of it.

              Even if this is based on someone real, try to strengthen the hook and family part so that this can be more than ‘Boogie Nights in Texas’.

              Mentor Answered on May 4, 2019.

              Yeah well i think production was just a natural progression towards a life of depravity. So to clarify, yes he definitely falls into production after starting out with distribution.  My  thoughts were his initial goal was to provide for his struggling family, however this skewed as the movie progresses, and his goal ultimately becomes being the Mr Pornography in Texas.

              on May 8, 2019.
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