When a young, successful driven singer’s life becomes subdued in the hands of her corrupted uncle and his label, she must seek a way out to regain back control, within herself and those she love.
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What specific event forces/motivates her to take action at the start of the story?
What is the her flaw? She seems perfect at this point, and perfect characters are normally boring.
What is the character’s specific goal? What must she achieve, or fail to achieve, by the end of the story?
What is at stake? What’s the worst that will happen should she succeed or fail?