Sign Up Sign Up

Captcha Click on image to update the captcha.

Have an account? Sign In Now

Sign In Sign In

Forgot Password?

If you'd like access, Sign Up Here

Forgot Password Forgot Password

Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.

Captcha Click on image to update the captcha.

Have an account? Sign In Now

Sign in, or sign up to post a logline, as only logged in users can see all.

Forgot Password?

To see everything, Sign Up Here
Logline It! Logo Logline It! Logo
Sign InSign Up

Logline It!

Logline It! Navigation

  • START HERE
  • Formula
  • Examples
  • Contact
  • News
Search
Post Your Logline

Mobile menu

Close
Post Your Logline
  • Login
  • Signup
giannisggeorgiouSamurai
Asked: September 24, 20182018-09-24T21:38:15+10:00 2018-09-24T21:38:15+10:00In: Comedy

When abducted because of his secret, a clumsy teenager with acidic semen must save himself and a porn actress from the set and crew of a deranged snuff film director.

When abducted because of his secret, a clumsy teenager with acidic semen must save himself and a porn actress from the set and crew of a deranged snuff film director.
  • 0
  • 5 5 Reviews
  • 609 Views
  • 0 Followers
  • 0
Review
Share
  • Facebook

    5 Reviews

    • Voted
    • Oldest
    • Recent
    1. Mike Pedley

      Mike Pedley

      • United Kingdom (UK)
      • 70 Loglines
      • 694 Reviews
      • 100 Best Reviews
      • 51,213 Points
      View Profile
      Mike Pedley Singularity
      2018-09-24T23:50:52+10:00Added an answer on September 24, 2018 at 11:50 pm

      Sounds intriguing. What’s the arc for the protagonist? If the fact that he’s got acidic semen is the secret… how does the snuff film director know about it?

      I would maybe consider just trimming it down as I’m not sure you need to say “set and crew”. I could be swayed but, to me, “save himself and a porn actress from a deranged snuff film director” works just as well.

      Is this a short or a feature length? I’m not sure that, comedically or plot-wise, there’s enough to sustain 90mins+. I can’t help but think that once the first “acidic cum” joke is spent what else is there?

      I look forward to what comes next…

      • 0
      • Share
        Share
        • Share on Facebook
        • Share on Twitter
        • Share on LinkedIn
        • Share on WhatsApp
    2. giannisggeorgiou

      giannisggeorgiou

      • 12 Loglines
      • 132 Reviews
      • 17 Best Reviews
      • 4,749 Points
      View Profile
      giannisggeorgiou Samurai
      2018-09-25T01:51:44+10:00Added an answer on September 25, 2018 at 1:51 am

      Version 1.1 (shorter):

      When abducted because of his secret, a withdrawn teenager with acidic semen must save himself and a porn actress from a deranged snuff film director.

      • 0
      • Share
        Share
        • Share on Facebook
        • Share on Twitter
        • Share on LinkedIn
        • Share on WhatsApp
    3. Richiev

      Richiev

      • 64 Loglines
      • 3,532 Reviews
      • 308 Best Reviews
      • 81,981 Points
      View Profile
      Richiev Singularity
      2018-09-25T08:38:58+10:00Added an answer on September 25, 2018 at 8:38 am

      Possible title: Blow Hard (Sorry, couldn’t help it)

      • 0
      • Share
        Share
        • Share on Facebook
        • Share on Twitter
        • Share on LinkedIn
        • Share on WhatsApp
    4. Neer Shelter

      Neer Shelter

      • 23 Loglines
      • 2,805 Reviews
      • 258 Best Reviews
      • 55,449 Points
      View Profile
      Neer Shelter Singularity
      2018-09-25T11:52:50+10:00Added an answer on September 25, 2018 at 11:52 am

      By acidic do you mean like the alien’s blood in Alien? Otherwise, it implies and uncomfortable experience for his co star but otherwise no big deal.

      If you’re trying to create a story about someone out of their depth in the porn world, Orgazmo would be a good reference – I’m not sure how long a withdrawn teenager could believably stay a fish out of water in porn.

      • 0
      • Share
        Share
        • Share on Facebook
        • Share on Twitter
        • Share on LinkedIn
        • Share on WhatsApp
    5. Lucius Paisley

      Lucius Paisley

      • 27 Loglines
      • 235 Reviews
      • 7 Best Reviews
      • 425 Points
      View Profile
      Lucius Paisley Logliner
      2018-09-25T12:13:39+10:00Added an answer on September 25, 2018 at 12:13 pm

      The funniest thing about this is “withdrawn”.

      HA. Puns.

      • 0
      • Share
        Share
        • Share on Facebook
        • Share on Twitter
        • Share on LinkedIn
        • Share on WhatsApp

    You must login to add an answer.

    Forgot Password?

    Sidebar

    Stats

    • Loglines 7,115
    • Reviews 30,911
    • Best Reviews 2,339
    • Users 3,478

    Explore

    • Recent Loglines
    • Most Visited
    • Review Needed
    • Random Pick
    • Followed Loglines
    • Active Logliners
    • Recent News

    Footer

    © 2020 The Story Department. All Rights Reserved
    With Love from Immersion Screenwriting.