When an black high school football star mysteriously disappears, his four friends and their dog set out to find him, discovering that things are much more sinister than they seem.

rcrown Penpusher Asked 4 days ago in Thriller.
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A person disappearing is pretty sinister. You need to be specific. Imagine you have to make a decision on funding. Do you have enough information here?

A single serial killer or an army of racist zombies? What’s the movie.

Hope this helps

CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed 4 days ago.
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What character would an a-list star want to play in your film? It needs to be the active one of the 4 friends, so start with that.

Why is mentioning the race of the missing important?

Foxtrot25 Overlord Reviewed 4 days ago.

>>>Why is mentioning the race of the missing important?

Because Black Lives Matter.

2 days ago.
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The first half of this logline isn’t bad, (Although I would drop the line about the dog) however I would listen to CraigD on the back half and be a little more specific.

Richiev Singularity Reviewed 3 days ago.
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>>>> discovering that things are much more sinister than they seem

It goes without saying that the protagonist always starts out on his struggle underestimating the risks involved, the jeopardy, the psychological and physical price he will eventually discover he has to pay to succeed.  That’s part of the essential nature of drama, most particularly stories  belong to the action, thriller, adventure genres.

So it isn’t necessary to say what goes without saying.

dpg Singularity Reviewed 2 days ago.
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