When Arthur goes to work in the front yard to escape his wife’s nagging, he accidentally walks into a “best yard” contest with his neighbor.

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    Default Posted on January 29, 2013 in Public.
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      This logline tells us nothing about the story.

      “He walks into a “Best yard” contest with his neighbor… doe he watch the contest? Why does he care? Does he enter into it as well as his neighbor? What are the stakes? Why is it important to him? What will he lose if he doesn’t win? What is his goal? How will he achieve his goal?

      Anyway; there is a premise here but I don’t see story unless you add to it.

      Singularity Answered on January 29, 2013.
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      I have to agree with Richiev here in that it doesn’t tell us anything other than a man leaves his house and begins a small rivalry. What I think the log line should focus on is the competition he will be having against his neighbour instead of how it starts.

      Default Answered on January 30, 2013.
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        Thanks a bunch! Let me fiddle with it a bit…

        Default Answered on January 30, 2013.
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