When dad goes bankrupt, one percenter Adam Lewis must learn to live within his means.

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    Penpusher Posted on June 22, 2017 in Student Loglines.
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      “When dad goes bankrupt a spoiled trust-fund baby must do the one thing he never ever wanted to do, get a job”

      Singularity Answered on June 22, 2017.

      Whelp. That’s perfect. Thanks!

      on June 22, 2017.
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        How’s does this work? Does he have to get a job? Sell things? Is he given a minder? Plus don’t use a name, it’s not needed and doesn’t mean anything in the story.

        Summitry Answered on June 22, 2017.

        Get a job, that’s what I was going for. I think his dad tries to sell things. Thanks for the tip on the name- i’ll definitely keep that in mind going forward.

        on June 22, 2017.
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          Richiev, as usual, has nailed the essential issue:  a plot should be a conspiracy against the protagonist such that it forces him to do what he fears most,  what he hates doing most.

          A logline should describe exactly what he must do anyway.

           I like Richiev’s take better because how can the character live within his means if he has no means?  No doubt, he has to tighten his belt, but doesn’t he also need to find a source of income?  Like get a job?

          Singularity Answered on June 22, 2017.

          You’re absolutely spot on I think. That’s what the script’s about. I’ve been fighting myself trying to write the script and dealing with some superficial “emotional issues” cause I haven’t gotten the throughline clear.

          on June 22, 2017.
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            “Get a Job” could actually work as the title.

            Singularity Answered on June 22, 2017.

            Aaaand a working title. You helped me immensely, thank you!

            on June 22, 2017.
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              Best if you would specify exactly how he’ll make ends meat. Does he have to be a waiter in the country club he previously was a member of? Does he have to mow the lawn for all their previously super-rich neighbors? Or will he go into crime?

              It’s the details of his humiliation that will make his fish out of water predicament fun.

              Singularity Answered on June 22, 2017.

              I agree that the details will help it. I think the more general descriptor (“get a job”) from above is better in the logline. Gonna brainstorm shitty jobs now though. Thanks!

              on June 22, 2017.

              The type of job will help describe the style and possibly even genre. Working as a janitor v body washer in a morgue v office worker will each make a vastly different film.

              The other problem you have is a lack of a clear goal. What is the end game for the MC? Surviving can continue on for a lifetime, but what achievement will mark the end of his story? Again, knowing his specific action will help to figure this out.

              on June 22, 2017.

              >>Best if you would specify exactly how he’ll make ends meat

              Hmm, not so sure.  What if he’s totally unqualified for any job because being a rich kid he has no previous experience, no training, no skills in anything?  He never went to college (or dropped out), partied  his way through high school.  His goal is to find a job, any job.

              on June 22, 2017.

              “… What if he’s totally unqualified for any job because being a rich kid…”

              That will make him a great fish out of water character.

              The more unlikely he is to succeed in the job the better, the details of the job will help envision the way in which it will become the out of water environment so describing it is important.

              on June 26, 2017.
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                When his father goes bankrupt…

                Summitry Answered on June 22, 2017.

                I see what you mean, but I kinda liked the informality of just “dad.” I think it adds voice which can help show the tone of the film.

                on June 22, 2017.
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