Hello Logline it people!
It’s me again. I’ve been working so hard on the same logline:
When a naive and shy young man loses his humanity to an evil futuristic corporation, he tries to destroy it to free himself and others with the questionable help of two sides, good and evil, from which he finds no difference.
I followed these points to make the newer one:
- I had in mind… What if the fantasy characters you created went to the real world?
- Now I give a little more role to the protagonist’s companion.
- I have changed the origins of the characters a bit, but the fact that they do bad things thinking they are good is the same.
- It was hard to find a main antagonist. I had like 5 in my mind! But i will start with this mafia boss because it’s not very complex.
I really hope this is better!
You can tell me where I could improve. I will try to be active often on this website.
PS: I also made this shorter version, but I don’t know if it’s right:
When fantasy characters invade the big city’s system, a frustrated dreamer, and his imaginary robot girlfriend, who result being someone who was kidnapped years ago by the head of organized crime, must team up to unravel the mysteries of the other characters past lifes by using brute force and a two-faced mask to cover their insecurities.