When he falls in love with an alcoholic cop in rehab, a drug addicted mobster must keep his new love from discovering his mafia heritage in order to run away with her and escape his toxic family.

Samurai Posted on March 18, 2019 in Drama.
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I think this is the best version of the logline so far.

Singularity Answered on March 18, 2019.
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I agree with Richiev, this is definitely heading in the right direction. I’m seeing it as more of a rom-com though.

The only thing I think might need work is the goal – currently there’s kinda 2. Keeping his mafia heritage from his new love AND escaping his toxic family. If the inciting incident is falling in love then the goal needs to relate to that so consider just sticking with the “hiding heritage” approach. There’s nothing else in the logline to suggest he wants out of his lifestyle so this bit comes as a surprise to me.

Also, there’s no way she’s going to run away with him unless she’s in love with him too. I think it’d be really interesting to have them both hiding their professions from each other – they just fall in love in rehab (the key is that they fall in love with each other – not just him falling in love with her). If the audience is aware of both of their backgrounds (maybe not immediately – midpoint reveal?) you could have a lot of fun with them.

Interested to see where this goes.

Singularity Answered on March 18, 2019.
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Agree with Mike.

There are many movies (and that means even more scripts) with a criminal and cop falling in love, though I can’t say this exact plot is familiar. Then the mafia part is passé and the two create a vibe of the story being less than great. Must he be Italian? Must she be a cop or can she be a teacher or a target’s daughter? Is there something else significant that hasn’t been mentioned?

Is it plausible for a drug user to be at AA often enough to fall in love?

Mentor Answered on March 19, 2019.
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I gotta agree with Robb Ross.  Must the criminal gang always be Italian/Sicilians?  It’s so overused.  There plenty of other criminal gangs to choose from.  Latino, Black, Chinese, Korean, Japanese, Russian — spread the notoriety around.

Be that as it may, I suggest that she fall in love with him in spite of knowing his background.

FWIW, I would also point out that recovery romances are strongly discouraged by counselors. Clients in recovery mode are emotionally unstable and vulnerable; they are at a high risk of relapse. Recovery romances are often star-crossed relationships. And too often, when one partner relapses, he/she drags the other down with him/her.  Those risks should be a part of the story.

Singularity Answered on March 19, 2019.
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Agree with the other reviews, the plot seems a bit thin. Is there a rule that they couldn’t date especially seeing the cop is alcoholic? Apart from them falling in love is there more to the story?

Penpusher Answered on March 20, 2019.
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